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I felt unusually inspired to write a memoir in song format on my relationship with my father, it wasn't a easy relationship and I miss him always.
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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Impact

I have to say I was thoroughly impressed by this piece! The journey of a young man plagued by sorrows and disappointment has an oddly real feeling to it. The words flow together and I made a catchy beat in my head to follow the words, it's so realistic that it hurts a little inside. It gives a lot of details for the reader/listener to chew on but doesn't just explain every little detail like why the father had the philosophy he shared in the beginning. The end feels like a punch to the gut. The automobile accident, the separation of the company just... ugh I can't put it in words! The piece reflects on itself with the father's philosophy being true but in an unexpected way. The lines work very well off of each other and the relative rhyming is done beautifully. It is truly a good read, I sincerely do recommend!